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CansaFis Foote's avatar

…it is 100% a poem…appreciate you and this thoughtful response brother…also love that you approached this from the position of a craftsman, sharing the construction...which is a poetry unto itself...i guess that begs the larger question of is the entirety a poem just as much as the minutiae within... love the BTS dude thanks...as love that you married prompting to a poem semi-made of prompts...i was just curious about the don't as opposed to the do...why did you settle on the side of the don't instead of the do...as someone who don'ts often (https://cansafis.substack.com/p/just-dont-it) just curious what appealed in the change you made between action 3 & 4...what was the mini inspo?...

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Harrison Moore's avatar

oh I seeee. Great question! So the truth is I didn't spend a ton of time thinking about it; I just went with what felt most compelling. "If you know you won't smile when you see it, don't paint it" felt more compelling than "Paint what you want to see." I guess because it's a little more spiky. And as I say, it also felt more poetic and allowed me to put the verbs at the end instead of the beginning.

What would a less spiky, positively-phrased poetic version of that line be with the verbs at the end? Gosh, I don't know! Do you?

"Paint what makes you smile when you see it" maybe?

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CansaFis Foote's avatar

…i kind of like a fully active take…going in for a remix…

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buy be happy, sell it.

receive feeling thrilled, send it.

itching you find, seek it.

learn it, light up, teach it.

delight you think, say it.

bewitch, you hear it, play it.

smile, see it, paint it.

imagine wanting, read it, write it.

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Harrison Moore's avatar

Maaaaaate we shoulda collaborated on this!

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CansaFis Foote's avatar

...we just did :)...

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